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charlee
February 8th, 2009, 09:59 PM
here's a bit of shit i've wrote in the past couple months. I know it should be in the literature forum but seriously who the fuck goes in there? I'd just like a couple reads and comments on these. Its worth your five minutes.

Number one.
blood was splattered,
shit had happened,
things were shattered,
but im still askin,
i need not know the reasons why,
ive felt before,
so i curse the sky,

why oh why does it persist,
intenetions good,
but still i miss,
maybe its that ive been cursed,
as soon as shit gets better,
it all turns for the worst,
if at all i dont go berserk,
through the trials i get less hurt,
effort i put, time was wasted,
is this how i face it,
writing poems, waste more time,
idly sit and waste my life,
if it truley is a mate i need,
i cannot go on and let my anger feed,
because one damn day,
on one poor soul,
my seal will break,
and ill lose control,
but to this soul i will debt,
they've freed my from my life of stress,
fresh ill start,
a new life begin,
i can't gauruntee,
i wont choose the path again
but if i do,
ill tell you this,
for those who cross me,
they will wish,
they'd never met a person like thee,
cuz you can only hurt one part of me,
after hes been damaged so many times,
he turns for worse inside these rhymes,
for once was two, can turn to one,
the evil half, of his righteous son,
though he tried, it was constant war,
for control of a being who's never pure,
victory for now, it shall not remain,
when evil turns to pity and shame,
i will rise and i will reign,

Number Two.
beatin bloody broken and bruised,
washed up broke dick worthless and used,
feel my pain no you wont i deal with it all,
i got a fifth of vodka and hand full of adderal,
am i hungry for love or am i starving for hate,
throw me in my prison and lock the gate,
who am i, im certainly not sane,
cuz i grab the sleigh by the horns and the bull by the reins,
if you didnt get the last line try the other way around,
now if only i had a rhythm and beat that pounds,
I'd be sittin like a king high on my throne,
homies galore but personally still alone,
my mind wanders from subject ranging from this and to that,
when will i die, will i be famous, will i be better then that,
i know i am but the world treats me wrong,
maybe if had talent enough to write this mother fuckin song,
maybe i do and maybe i dont, irregaurdless this shit has been wrote,
but all of which is meaningless with a knife at your throat,
if you like what im writin ask for your own,
if you hate what im doin then ill burn down your home,
I'm a little bit crazy and a little bit stoned,
but i can open your eyes to what has never been shown,
lemme tell you somethin bout this world today,
if you've a little dick, fat, have acne or your gay,
you'll be looked down upon like your were somethin else,
and they'll never have to go through the shit that you've felt,
lucky for them there lives are already made,
like when a dude walks in the room talkin bout how he gots game,
how he can fuck any bitch and constantly get laid,
well guess what mother fucker some of us dont,
not that i cant but its better that i wont,
cuz when your 25 and lieing in a hospital bed,
ill be 40 mother fucker laughin at you cuz your dead,
and if you think that its harsh stupid open your eyes,
its all a fucking illusion, a glasses and mustache disguise,
and i know the subject changes randomly at will,
but i do this shit sober no weed drink or pills,
you can do anything at any fuckin time,
set your mind to it and soon you will find,
that a little bit of effort goes a long way,
hopfully you took something from what i said here today.

Number Three.
i dont know where to start or how to begin,
i dont know where im at or how i got in,
though familiar strange and vacant,
a ship i voyaged til i sank it,
sword in hand i serenade,
as i pull the pin on my last grenade,
i wont go down until they fall,
if i take myself ill take them all,
they have drown and ive escaped,
i swam the ocean at a steady pace,
my arms are weak and legs are limp,
find an island or lay with the shrimp,
my bayonet weigh twenty pounds,
but i cannot leave her as she never let me down,
swim and swim i long for a sound,
of a coming ship before i drown,
a pirates life is the life indeed,
until your stranded in the belov'ed sea,
the wrath of waves and the beating sun,
what i'd give for a little fun,
but as i swim ive made a game,
try and recount the men ive slain,
what is this an island i see,
or has my mind got the best of me,
probability turns to doubt,
but theres only one way to find out...

it feels so warm inside my hand,
as i lay face up on top the sand,
i open my eyes to my suprise,
i have new robes and my hair is dry,
i take a second look i cannot believe,
who it is that stands in front of me,
he died in my arms from a bullet wound
my old best friend from the 331st platoon,
jaw wide open i was still astound,
he offered his hand to help me from the ground,
where was i how what when and why,
he chuckled as he said that we both lived in the sky,
he said you put forth effort for you life,
just to see your dog your kids and wife,
though not now soon enough,
they'll find there way to the rest of us,
til then brother grab a beer
a life times as fast as you can drink up here.

Number four. This was written about a bong that was smashed by the owners dad when he was very drunk and angry. R.i.p. chief.

Way back when around the age of fifteen,
We had just began sellin on route to be come kings,
We were oh so high, we couldn't be seen,
Sittin atop the clouds, smokin on chief,
Til one sad day, Chief got broke,
& for the moment that it happend, No need to toke,
No urge to drink those fifth's in my coat,
Dead silence like there was a rock in my throat,
This is what happens, When a tru homie dies,
When they leave our world to go live in the sky,
The hardest thing ive ever done is too see my best friend cry,
In our hearts your memory lies,
R.I.P

ill post more later.

a2thae
February 8th, 2009, 10:21 PM
Moved to literature.

charlee
February 8th, 2009, 10:25 PM
You could of at least friken read it.

crazyassmetalhead
February 8th, 2009, 10:26 PM
i was gonna comment there, but then i was gonna post something i wrote too.......then i couldn't find it, then i forgot.........then i found some of it..........then i put it off......then i forgot again......then i remembered.....idk

but ya good shit. i like the 2nd one best..... i feel like shit right now and i'm tired otherwise i'd be specific and shit as to what about it i like and such.....


and irregaurdless is spelled wrong or just straight up not a word.........i think just regardless would work there. but other than that some pretty dark kinda phsycopathic shit......i like it.

charlee
February 8th, 2009, 10:29 PM
Thanks, i noticed that too about irreguardless, i dont like to change it after its wrote tho. i'd like to hear some of yours when you get the chance. I mostly write these cuz im bored sober and on probation. A bit of a hobby to pass the time.

crazyassmetalhead
February 8th, 2009, 10:39 PM
i just posted a song on the poetry thread....

working title is "fuck the jesus outta you"

lol

charlee
February 9th, 2009, 04:13 AM
I read it. It was gnarly.

exial
February 9th, 2009, 11:03 AM
for control of a being who's never pure,
victory for now, it shall not remain,
when evil turns to pity and shame,
i will rise and i will reign,
-epic..

charlee
February 9th, 2009, 11:17 AM
Thank you.

exial
February 10th, 2009, 12:16 PM
Death befalls all those that seek life,
for within the bounds of reality
lie a truth none can deny..

AssRot
February 10th, 2009, 10:23 PM
Alas my attention span is too short

LiveWire
February 11th, 2009, 01:12 AM
nice an dark.. love it.

charlee
February 12th, 2009, 10:07 PM
preciate it.

exial
February 22nd, 2009, 06:24 PM
Post another one dude?

charlee
February 24th, 2009, 05:30 PM
I wrote this at school today. It is all one poem. It took most of the day. Read and Review please.


While I'm sittin at school I'm distracted I wander,
The halls of my mind, The future I ponder,
Still as a statue, Depth like the sky,
If you ever said you missed me, Don't say you never lied,

I'm a king with no throne, A ruler with no land,
A sound in the wind, A pebble of sand,
What's the purpose of being, How will i spend my life,
Will I live on the edge of a blade of a knife,
As the end nears, half a life most haven given,
To live up to new world living conditions,
I'm not spittin these rhymes so I can be stuffin my pockets,
I'm not spittin these rhymes so I can blow up like rockets,
Writing this shit helps get through those hard times,
When I'm getting depressed, When I'm losing my mind,
A genius I am on subjects that interest,
When effort is put my skills are at best,
This helps to relieve this weight on my chest,
Slowly numbing the pain, Neutralizing the stress,
Conscious is hell, Sleep is my heaven,
I wake up to snakes, While i dream of elevens,
Suicide is pointless, I'd rather a martyr,
Neither is an option, For sake of future sons and granddaughters,

I visualize a place with a porch and a pool,
A 2-car garage and a bar with 4 stools,
A spiral staircase and a clock that stands tall,
Photos of past memories portray family & friends, They cover the wall,
The dogs run the yard and play with the kids,
While my wife & myself go on hiatus a bit,
This place i imagine has no rules or no boundaries,
Yet it only exists when I'm sleeping quite soundly,
Though this place is merely a dream,
The more that I rhyme the more realistic it seems,

This talent I posses, And the skill that I've got,
Creates this slight possibility to make it on top,
But once it starts flowing, You can't tell it to stop,
So I'm gonna put in some work, and igve it a shot,
Try is to do, As attempt is to complete,
As half-ass is too perfect, And sloppy is to neat,
Five is too six, As three is too four,
Gate is too fence, As wall is too door,
These pages are finished, Now I'm off to lunch,
I'll conclude by saying i love my homies a bunch.

AssRot
February 24th, 2009, 05:32 PM
I dont know anything about poetry but i looks pretty good to me

charlee
February 24th, 2009, 05:45 PM
Bump/Thanks.

exial
February 24th, 2009, 08:13 PM
Damn, that was some deep rhymes.

charlee
February 24th, 2009, 08:17 PM
I think i shall make this a daily thing...

AvengedX7
February 24th, 2009, 09:12 PM
I'm going to try and add my stuff to this. I'm an ultra noob to it but it'll get better with time. Yours will make mine look like shit but here we go:

My first one ever

This was at the beginning of winter when i was, well somewhat depressed.

I am fragile,
I find myself doing nothing,day in, and day out
Boredom envelopes me as i sink into the bottomless cesspit people refer to as "society"
As I gasp for breath
The thought that people live with this shit makes me gag and my insanity ensues
Claim me now, for I may never make my way back

^ this was months ago and i didnt write in my journal for quite a while so this is my second one but very different

The insanity is gone
My eyes are now open
I have learned the secrets
Why haven't I shown them?

All you need is happiness,
Just do whatever it takes
Open your mind to enlightenment
Cut out all of the fakes

All they do is poison
And add to the cesspit
Adding to the cause
That makes this world shit

I just want to clean them,
to show them, to treat them,
To make them understand

But their minds are too fragile
Their hearts are too weak
They deal with the bullshit
They add to the pain
It seems all they do
Is drive me insane

So how can I show them?
How can I teach?
If their ignorance is a dark shirt,
Let me be the bleach

But what if they don't take it?
What if they don't accept?
Then i guess they are not worth it,
My motive is a lost cause

Please let me know what you think. Next ones won't be so damn dark

AvengedX7
February 24th, 2009, 09:15 PM
"Conscious is hell, sleep is my heaven"

I feel you there

My sister writes too, she goes to carnegie ***lon for art and obviously academics.
She won a scholarship to prague for the summer shes so good.

I'll post some of her stuff when i find it

charlee
February 24th, 2009, 09:28 PM
If you could hear me clap i'd clap. Otherwise the second one was very good.

AvengedX7
February 24th, 2009, 09:34 PM
Who says i can't? You're underestimating my hearing charlee.

And thank you its a work in progress

crazyassmetalhead
February 24th, 2009, 09:48 PM
they were both pretty sick.......actually all three.

charlee has the whole rap thing going now lol, it's pretty sweet. i can hear that shit to a beat as i read it....but i relate to a7x's more because it's dark and shit and well.....that's just me right now.

exial
February 24th, 2009, 11:19 PM
I'm going to try and add my stuff to this. I'm an ultra noob to it but it'll get better with time. Yours will make mine look like shit but here we go:

My first one ever

This was at the beginning of winter when i was, well somewhat depressed.

I am fragile,
I find myself doing nothing,day in, and day out
Boredom envelopes me as i sink into the bottomless cesspit people refer to as "society"
As I gasp for breath
The thought that people live with this shit makes me gag and my insanity ensues
Claim me now, for I may never make my way back

^ this was months ago and i didnt write in my journal for quite a while so this is my second one but very different

The insanity is gone
My eyes are now open
I have learned the secrets
Why haven't I shown them?

All you need is happiness,
Just do whatever it takes
Open your mind to enlightenment
Cut out all of the fakes

All they do is poison
And add to the cesspit
Adding to the cause
That makes this world shit

I just want to clean them,
to show them, to treat them,
To make them understand

But their minds are too fragile
Their hearts are too weak
They deal with the bullshit
They add to the pain
It seems all they do
Is drive me insane

So how can I show them?
How can I teach?
If their ignorance is a dark shirt,
Let me be the bleach

But what if they don't take it?
What if they don't accept?
Then i guess they are not worth it,
My motive is a lost cause

Please let me know what you think. Next ones won't be so damn dark

Theirs alot of darkness in these versus.

charlee
March 31st, 2009, 10:14 PM
Since you guys are awesome, heres a sneek peek into the song im actually gonna record.
First a bit from the first verse.

Words i've spoken, are out-worldly and mystic,
two types of rhymes unbelievable and ballistic,
Bombarding the hearts blind to simple logic,
like contrasting appearances between standard and chronic,
supersonic wavelengths produce binural beats,
this intoxication creates amusing yet theatrical feats,
Least be the worry of producers of such,
For those who have crippled me will now be my crutch,

and something from the second verse,

Thoughts i express, cause cringe, reason sting,
attempt contemplation forth you hail me king,
shits twiztid, bizzar, astrange, thus erratic,
escape is improbable tis the clench of kraken,
eye sockets blacken, as sequences elapse,
weaken the foundations of reality, it begins to collapse,

Thats all for now folks.

charlee
April 12th, 2009, 02:28 PM
b-b-b-bb-bb-b-bump'd up

exial
April 12th, 2009, 03:21 PM
thats sick charlee. im lookin forward to readin the rest. its not like most rap, its got some pritty interesting flows and words. makes me want to get creative and hit some verses on paper.

charlee
April 12th, 2009, 11:33 PM
DAMN STRAIGHT! And you can be first to hear it.

N0M4N
April 13th, 2009, 09:47 AM
that songs awesome dude.

Death befalls all those that seek life,
for within the bounds of reality
lie a truth none can deny..

^ dude...
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exial
April 13th, 2009, 10:21 AM
respect NOM4N :D

N0M4N
April 13th, 2009, 03:44 PM
right back at you exial. :p

charlee
April 17th, 2009, 09:49 PM
Ay, Unquote Damnit

windsor357
April 22nd, 2009, 09:34 PM
That was awesome Charlee, you the man

charlee
April 25th, 2009, 12:39 AM
Much appreciated.

exial
May 4th, 2009, 01:33 AM
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XZ0rzsBEZKM&feature=related
I will write some words that are not rehearsed
words that flow out of my mind with a solid mission
to infiltrate your mind with subliminal messages
so dont focus on my words becuz they are hard to swallow
and my ryme is constantly ahead of me with a deceny of slowing to my beat
and my words are not fancy or sweet, but scarred underneath
cursed words are what i see when im alseep
i lose focus and my mind overlaps, with constant contradicting facts
so i will step aside and let these verses proceed with a reality that scares the shit out of me

sometimes i lost sight of myself
the shadow overlapse and end my dream
but a message i percieve
from a demon that is within me

behemooth rescue i
from these binding ties
that these lyrics combine
my mind refuses to cope with
dark words that i see whenever i close my eyes to sleep
exial is what i am underneath this fascade that u see

are you what you believe?
are u who u say to be?
or are u a infidel within yourself?
subliminally infiltrating ur mind with propaganda that is
in reality crazy, that got us all chasing paper money